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Meeting a Lovlies by ~ACauseRemains:iconACauseRemains:



Meeting a Lovelies

Water sparkles from her form
she is the sun
the lake alive with
Leda bathing,
her oils suckled by the blue

Beckons an antithesis of swans
a bedraggled black hen
humbled beneath the mud
turned reverent by the easy grace
in a divine smile
comes lonely to worship

So full of awe he cannot see
the foul beneath the fair
And with a stroke from fractured femme
becomes her slave

She, bored and pissed at no white wizards
decides to tear his little black wings
in a heap
an analgetic to disgust
which plagues her.

Wingless, poor bird
(who hardly flew before,)
waddles off unsteady
Knowing of Lilith.
©2005-2009 ~ACauseRemains
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Challenge #8
Elementa: include water, a classical allusion, and a mental condition.


This was an attempt at humor. Ugh... Please feel free to comment and suggest.

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:iconshortidiva19:
a Beethoven romance...:D

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Perfect!! Someone finally fulfilled all the precepts of my challenge! It's a wonderful piece I might add.

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:iconacauseremains:
Thanks! And thanks for the challange and the favorite!

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Your fears are tools for manipulators. Take a little salt with the sauce. It'll make you smile. :) Peace.
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Thanks for reading! Thanks for commenting! Thanks for the fav! Heh...I really appreciate the feedback.

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Your fears are tools for manipulators. Take a little salt with the sauce. It'll make you smile. :) Peace.
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Hah! This is too smart a poem for me... I barely get it... but I likes it lots! Great title too...

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